After given
the option to decide which of the two previous essays I would use as my third
essay, I decided to use my essay on rhetorical analysis. I chose to redo this essay because it will be
easier to write about. Although writing about an advertisement isn’t a
difficult assignment it is not easy to go in depth. The advertisement I wrote
about was an ad for Red Bull. There is only so much you can write about an
advertisement for Red Bull. The essay on Rhetorical Analysis is easier to
analyze. I will be able to criticize both the writer and the article, rather
than just making one interpretation off of an advertisement.
In my
revision the first thing I plan to revise is the title. I need to come with an
original and catchy title of my own. In my first draft I used the title of the
article as the title of my paper. In my essay I also contradicted myself a few
times. I plan to fix this problem and state my opinion in a clear way that
makes sense with the rest of my essay. My first paragraph was much stronger
than the second body paragraph. In my essay I wrote about how the author failed
to mention he had a novel out. I am going to take this part out of my essay
because it actually made my argument weaker. I need to write a better
conclusion and write something that leaves the audience with something to think
about.
I hope to
improve my paper and get a better grade on my final draft. I am also hoping
that the things I learned from editing my paper help me in my future essays.
